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Audience- The audience for my project 2 was probably the professor and other students interested in dentistry as a profession. I’m not sure what points to the whole professor aspect, but the other students are pointed to when I discuss dentistry as a major and profession and the difficulties they face in school. This is kind of a warning given to the other studnets, and is how I point to them as my audience. 

Context- I’m not entirely sure what the “context” of my paper was because I’m not really sure what it means… But I think that it means why did I write what I wrote. I discussed the technology aspects of dentistry because there were a lot of aspects of dentistry that I didn’t understand and was very very confused about. I didn’t know that it was important to realize how to use the technology that is provided in dentistry and how everything works. I point to this in my paper by discussing that there are a lot of other technologies like chairs, tools, charts, and toothbrushes that people don’t often realize are a part of dentistry.

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I don’t have too many questions about project 4 but the big one was that I’m not sure exactly how my project 2 really went so I dont really understand what needs to be done to fix it. THe other question I have is how much editing is supposed to be done and what we are doing it for. I think in order to answer these questions I will be emailing my professor to clarify. I just need to go through the guidelines for project 2 and then through the paper I wrote and figure out who my audience is and what needs to happen with it and what needs to happen with the paper to make it more professional and worthwhile. I got this.

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Project 3 definitely went a lot better for me than the other projects did. I liked that all we had to do was tell a story. It makes the writing process a lot easier than usual because all you have to do is act like you’re talking to a friend. Maybe I completely missed the ball on this project, because it seemed waaaay easier than I thought. It was actually kind of hard to remember that I don’t want to have a really intense conclusion or end, I just want to finish with details from my story. Again I kind of had an issue with the peer review process because I didn’t really get any feedback. I never get any comments or criticism towards my paper, which makes the editing process a lot harder. I think that I kind of got the paper right towards the end with comments from the professor, but that takes away from the peer comments. It was a good process over all though, I thought I did really well and I’m hoping I get the grade I thought I would! Next time I need to do my peer reviews sooner so they have more time to see what a peer review needs to show so that I get better comments!

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I thought that this paper responded really really well to the prompt. It definitely told a story that the author used to be distant from her mom and was brought closer and closer to her through facebook and other social media. I especially appreciated the background with how sassy she was and hwo it was so much easier to talk to her mom through facebook. It definitely told a story, but also really related to technology. I actually can’t find a way it didn’t relate to the prompt.

The MLA format also looks really good, except I’m not sure about the numbering on the first page. I need to remember to ask about that. The MLA formatting is pretty easy in this essay because there are no citations to worry about.

Sample Paper 6:

I think that this paper definitely responds pretty well to the prompt. The only thing I don’t like is that they dont really describe what RPing is. I’ve never heard of it before and therefore it made it hard to read the paper. It did tie together really well at the end there and really show how it has changed the authors life. All in all I thought it did a great job. 

I guess I”m not sure what you can mess up with MLA formatting in these types of papers because there is no citations. I feel like that means that it is really really difficult to mess it up, but they still did a good job!

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I think that in order to revise my paper I am going to be double checking the flow of my paper, because that was the biggest issue I found in others. Unfortunately, I didn’t get any reviews so I’m not really sure what all I need to work on… but I will decide more once I get reviews. It’ll be good for me to go over the flow but also to make sure I’m definitely following the prompt, by rereading it and making sure again.

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Arola’s thesis appears to be something along the lines of technology is changing constantly and becoming more and more advanced, and while she wishes she could always know how to do everything that technology is capable of, she is afraid to learn because she doesn’t want to admit that she knows how to in front of her disapproving friends and family. 

One of the biggest details I noticed was Arola’s constant repetition of one or two word sentences that are simply lists of technological devices. This really contributes to the part of the thesis that discusses how technology is advancing as it lists all of the new pieces coming out, and shows just how many there are. I thought this was a really cool literary technique.

Another detail that I noticed was how she organized her paper into a chronological timeline of sorts. She listed technologies that appeared when she was younger and discussed her run ins with technology at a young age and then slowly moved on to college. This also showed the major advancements of technology by showing how things have been changing and adapting to different points in her life. This technique made the paper seem more laid out and easier to understand.

A final detail that I thought was really cool was her mentioning of Grandma Myrtle. Discussing Grandma Myrtle’s thoughts on technology and desires to keep up with it sort of showed Arola’s desires to also want to keep up with technology, and not be afraid of it. This detail was introduced to subtly show that the author really wants to know about technology and be up and coming. 

All in all I thought this piece really responded well to our prompt. The only thing I am not sure of is that it didn’t really tell a story and it wasn’t as detailed as I thought it should be. My understanding was that we were supposed to focus solely on one or two events, and go into a lot of detail as opposed to share minor details about multiple events. Other than that though, the prompt appeared to be right on target and really told a story about the author’s past and how they feel about technology as well as the experiences they’ve had with it.

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This project definitely turned out to be a lot harder than I thought it would be. i was really confused because I had thought that it would be really simple to figure out how to cite sources and figure out how dentists use literacy and writing in their everyday lives. What I figured out by this was that it is important to realize that writing is actually much more important in dentistry than I thought.

I really wish the peer review process had a little bit more time because it seems like I never really get a proper response, I simply just get either no feedback, or just one or two comments. I definitely appreciate the comments given by the teacher, but sometimes I get confused as to how to edit the rest of my paper, the parts that weren’t commented on. Most of my process just involves fixing what the teacher commented on, and then re reading my paper to double check that it makes sense. I think I need a little help in editing.

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I had some trouble coming up with big technology moments in my life, but after immense thought, i came up with this:

1. When I built my first amplifier.

2. When I helped my dad fix the car’s engine.

3. When I first learned to type.

4. When I got my first cell phone.

5. When I learned how to play my first video game on N64.

THe most vivid of these experiences was when I first learned to type. I loved learning to type because it taught me how to be more self sufficient on the computer and do things for myself. I learned to type in our computer class in fourth grade. It’s funny, because my biggest memory from that class is that I got a bee caught in my hair and it stung me, and that’s when I found out I’m allergic to bees. Regardless, it was a really fun class.

I was in the class with all of my best friends from elementary school, and as long as we got our lessons done, our teacher, Ms. Hornbach, didn’t care what we did at all. SHe would always just let us hang out with our friends and do absolutely nothing. We usually just had to type the sentence “the quick brown fox jumped over the lazy brown dog.” because it has every letter in the alphabet in it. It was fun to see how much faster I could do it every week.

I remember that the room always smelled like new paper, which sounds weird, but it’s one of my favorite smells so I loved going to the class. i also remember hating the computer that I had to work with because the keys were always sticky on the keyboard and it took a ton of effort to push them down. It was a really great class, and a great memory!

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Onfe of the big things I noticed in this essay, right off the bat was how Scribner pointed out that there are extremes in literacy. THe standard amount of literacy knowledge and use for teachers is completely different than that for say, artists, or some other profession involving very little writing. However what I did notice was that Scribner was consistent it pointing out that EVERYONE uses writing and reading and needs to be literate to some point. My view of literacy has changed a little from reading this essay. I’ve noticed that literacy definitions have changed multiple times throughout history and that there really can’t be an exact definition of literacy, you just have to be as literate as possible.

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I think that Ramsdell has a lot to say about literacy that makes a lot of sense. Her view on the Who I Am story is really cool. I think that a lot of people have moments that define them throughout their lives, and yet when people tell stories about it, it is often done in really ineffective ways. I think that her entire essay was really interesting, but I completely loved that she discussed how the new versions of stories are involving beginnings, not necessarily middles or ends, just beginnings. This really hit home with me. I think this is a really valid point to make. Even when just telling a story to friends, once you make your point, there is always more to tell. I think that just because people are still living and adding to their stories, it is hard to find ends.